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He sat there on his rug.An 8 year old with raven black hair and extrordinary ocean blue eyes stared at the clouds with imagination.He saw things his family couldnt see.You see,He,unlike his family except his dad,was able to use extrordinary imagination even by staring at something plain like the clouds.So Once ler sat on his rug while watching the clouds roll on by.He saw a dog chaceing a cat,A horse running through the wind,And trees.Yes i know your thinking,"Wait trees,why just plain trees?"Well these arent every day trees.These were truffula trees.The rarest of them all.Once ler was admiring that cloud when another cloud rolled by.It was way different from any he had ever seen.It almost looked like a nighty but where the two leg sleeves were,it was only one hole instead of two.Excited by this cloud he grabbed a drawing pad and a pencil and drew the cloud."I will call it,the Thneed.It will be what everyone needs",Once ler declaired proudly.He wanted to show his mom so she would be happy for him and they would all laugh and she would love him.But as usual her reply to it was,"Oncie,when are gonna stop hanging your head in the clouds and be like your brothers?"Once ler tried to ask why she always said this but before he could she said,"Sweatie its time to face the music.Youre not gonna accomplish anything in life,You know that dont you?"Once ler sighed defeated."Yes mom".And with that He walked to his room and moped but then he thought,"She doesnt know what my future holds,anything could happen.I can still prove her wrong!"Then he thought,"One day i will show my family,no i will show EVERYONE,that I the little dreamer will become a success and the thneed will be what everyone will need".The truffula tree cloud rolled by agien."All I need is the tuft of just one truffula tree and then it will be ready for the world."But Once ler didnt know that there was more adventure in his future than just selling thneeds.He soon would meet the lorax and all the creatures that lived in the truffula forests.But for now its all in the little dreamers head.To be countinued....
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katemickey Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012
Great job!
It's really important that you make a space after each period, and that you start a new sentence every time someone talks.
It makes your work longer, and 200 times easier to read, no one wants to deal with a jumbled mass!

But I love your ideas so far (:
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ErikaRBarker Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012
Cute I love the idea of him watching clouds. :) It's just too cute!
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ChristmasKitten1 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student General Artist
Nice (:
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flymyway Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks
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ChristmasKitten1 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student General Artist
:)
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flymyway Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student Writer
Lol
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PatchLamb Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student General Artist
Very nice! A little short, but it's a good concept. The only thing you should be doing, really, is spacing after every punctuation mark. Including commas, colons, semi-colons, and dashes.
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flymyway Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student Writer
Ok I will try
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flymyway Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student Writer
Read and comment
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flymyway Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student Writer
I already finished chapter 2 and 3 all I need is more computer time.
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